MG Entry #11 – Julius Caesar Brown and the Green Gas Mystery

Name: Ace Hansen
Title: Julius Caesar Brown and the Green Gas Mystery
Genre: MG Humor Word Count: 33,000


Hook:


When a peculiar green gas crisis breaks wind, the Global Air Group (GAG) offers a million dollar prize to the discoverer of the cause. Julius dreams of winning, but it’s not until he’s forced to work for the creepy zombie lady down the street that an unlikely solution to the mystery appears. Will he send his entry in time?

Line:

The policeman’s eyebrows almost flew off his forehead.

Sinker:
The real Julius Caesar conquered the world.


All I wanted was to conquer a simple spelling test.


“Having trouble, Salad Boy?”

I set down my pencil and glared at Ben Purdee, the brainiest kid in fifth grade. “No problem.”


Yes I had a problem. And it wasn’t just how to spell brocolee.

Mrs. Tucker closed her book. “Time’s up. Pass them forward.”

I handed Ivy my test and pushed my chair away from my desk. The legs scraped the floor and made a loud, embarrassing noise.

Ivy Chen stared, her brown eyes wide as pie.

Ben nudged me and smirked. “Did you just—?”

“No! It was my chair. See?” I scooted back and forth trying to remake the suspicious sound, but I couldn’t. Ben moved his desk away from mine. Ivy’s nose twitched. My cheeks grew hot. “It really was the chair,” I mumbled.

Mrs. Tucker cleared her throat and held up yesterday’s math tests.

Uh oh.

“Most of you did great.” She narrowed her eyes as she handed out the tests. “A few of you did not.”

An angry red“D” screamed from the top of mine. I cringed. No matter how hard I tried, I didn’t get math. Or spelling. Or much else these days.

Ivy’s black ponytail flew past my nose as she turned and caught sight of my grade. She patted my hand. “Maybe we could meet at the library after school sometime and I could help you.”

I sat up. “That’d be great!”

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  2. Great voice! I'd like to see more. Please paste into the body of your email: your cover letter, synopsis and first three chapters, and send to: Submissions(at)akaliteraryllc(dot)com. In the subject heading please state: HL&S - Requested by Terrie - with your entry number.

    Many thanks,
    Terrie

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