MG Entry #8 - Double-Crossed

Name: Jayme Woods
Title: DOUBLE-CROSSED
Genre: MG Adventure Word count: 55,000

Hook:

When Stray blows his sister’s chance at a scholarship, their father’s pirate stories may be the only way to set things right. Along with three friends – and one reluctant enemy – the siblings hunt treasure while two gun-toting modern-day pirates hunt them. DOUBLE-CROSSED takes a ragtag group reminiscent of THE GOONIES and sets them loose in small town Florida.

Line:

“If I’ve only got fifteen minutes to live, I don’t want to spend them hiding.”

Sinker:
If annoying your sister was a sport, Amee Walsh felt certain her little brother would have thirteen gold medals, one for every year of his life. On the street, people would point and cheer, chasing after him to ask for autographs and training tips. His face would loom over the highway on billboards and line grocery store shelves, grinning from box after box of his very own breakfast cereal, Stray-O’s.

That’s what everyone called him. Stray. Like a dog no one wanted or the one-eyed cat who roamed the docks downtown, mewling for scraps.

But this story isn’t about the cat, and it isn’t about Stray. It’s about his sister and the adventure that finally turned her into her mother’s daughter.

The excitement started much the way things always did around the Walsh house – with a fight.

“One thing! I asked you to do one thing, Stray!”

“I know, but–”

“No! No buts!”

For the hundredth time, it occurred to Amee that, thanks to his recent growth spurt, she was now looking up at Stray despite being three years older. She shoved him onto the sofa so she could yell down at him.

“All you had to do was stay out of trouble until after my scholarship presentation. One tiny little hour. How hard is that?”

“C’mon, I said I was sorry.”

“Sorry!” Amee’s face blazed even more intensely than her fire-red hair. She couldn’t believe he didn’t have more to say for himself. Before his little performance, the Ramirez Sporting Goods scholarship had been as good as hers.

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1 comment:

  1. I love the part about the growth spurt, I am still the little sister and I know just how that feels!
    Would love to see more! May I?
    Please paste into the body of your email: your cover letter, synopsis and first three chapters, and send to: Submissions(at)akaliteraryllc(dot)com. In the subject heading please state: HL&S - Requested by Terrie - with your entry number.

    Many thanks,
    Terrie

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